Randy's Girl

So I think this is a really good poem for this subject. I like how you focus more on how she feels, than the cutting itself. I like how you ...

I definetly think you should continue the story it sounds really really good. I would love to see whee it goes:)

Wow I think it is really cool how well you vividly paint a picture with your words. It really speaks to the reader. In the end of the eight verse ...

I really like what you have to say. I think you should add more inbetween chorus it sounds like it is repeating itself just a little too much. "Did I ...

I really like how you mixed up all the letters even if it does make it harder to read. It helps the people reading understand what those people go through ...

You feel like someone Has cut out your heart There is an empty cavity You feel no love Your days are dark Without the light That only love shines The ...

I like the way you capture the story in your words. Though i would not use so many ands. They break it up I think it would be betterif you ...

Wow I totally like it the description is amazing!

Each casualty inflicted Leads to your fatality The cheerless room The locked doors The end of all humanity The antagonism spred The animosity inside The falsehood that we shared The ...